W.A.L.T recall events through the eyes of an animal.
Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when my recount has a
- Title
- Orientation: When? Who? Where? Why?
- Sequence of events: What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
- Personal Comment: How did the events make you feel?
(First Draft)
The worst day of my life.
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One nice morning i was working along the river bank ayy, can smell the fresh morning air. Suddenly the herd stopped then I could see that there was some lions in the distance. They were getting ready to pounce on us. There was nothing to do but to run. Bam I fell into the river bank. I started to sink then I got pulled out of the water but there was something sharp pulling my tail. Then I saw my dad, mum and my friends they were running to me and the lions. I could taste blood in my mouth. I can hear the ground shaking.
Finally i got back to my herd, my dad got really angry and started to ram the pack of lonis. I was so scared i just had hid at the back of the herd, but at least I made it i fell releft.
That's really good Inaka. You're not meant to put the highlight on the blog. How long did it take you?
ReplyDeleteNot that long Danielle thank you for commenting on my blog>
DeleteHi Inaka this is Sofia and, I really like your story about the calf, and I like you said it was something sharp pulling tail and I like your story about the calf and you need to work at your full stop because you have so many full stop.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sofia
DeleteThat is some good writing Inaka from Zowie xxx
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